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Size: Large, Medium, Small Sat Feb 23, 08 09:05 AM | Category: My Stories
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Dazzling colours sink on the  clouds,

Another day has passed,

Yet no kisses have parted my lips nor tears have passed my eyes,

 

Being alone amoungst the couples,

Ralling around the sun set,

Everthing is bright and beutiful,

And i am not part of it,

Kisses are exchanged as i turn and go,

 

I do not  belong here.

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Link: http://blog.bitcomet.com/post/17743/ ©
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Ichisanno (Michi) Sat Feb 23, 08 10:29 AM

mmm...

quite interesting and you got the point in the last stanza...

Wish I Had An Angel
VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Sat Feb 23, 08 11:39 AM

Do u like the name?

Make a wish on a shooting star.
monti_84 Sat Feb 23, 08 10:40 AM

Nice

"To define is to limit" Oscar Wilde
VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Sat Feb 23, 08 11:40 AM

Thank u.

Make a wish on a shooting star.
ALORD Sun Feb 24, 08 11:24 AM

i have been there ,but i don't belong there too,i just slowly say good bye


VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Sun Feb 24, 08 12:08 PM

I don't know whether i've been there or not (Probably not) but i definatly know i don't belong there. I hope that someday you can go back there with someone and be part of the beuty.

Make a wish on a shooting star.
dave195809 (south african dave) Sun Feb 24, 08 01:32 PM

hi sweetie well thanks love it voted hope you ok added you as friend hope thats ok

To all the fantastic people on bitcomet love you all
VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Mon Feb 25, 08 12:57 AM

Thats totaly fine with me in fact I'll add u as a friend back.

P.s. Thanks for the vote.

Make a wish on a shooting star.
muddshuvel Sun Feb 24, 08 03:37 PM

sad!any particular inspiration?

life is short,...play naked!
VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Mon Feb 25, 08 12:58 AM

It was wispered to me on the wings of the wind.

Make a wish on a shooting star.
walyy Sun Feb 24, 08 04:40 PM

shon


VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Mon Feb 25, 08 12:56 AM

Danke.

Make a wish on a shooting star.
mikemethod Fri Feb 29, 08 01:59 AM

It's beautiful, thank you for sharing it

If you've studied your Floyd properly, you'd know that pigs could fly
VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Fri Feb 29, 08 11:08 AM

My pleasure. (I don't think it's that good) Have u seen the others?

Make a wish on a shooting star.
army3700 Mon Mar 3, 08 12:49 AM

that nice i like it :) and i've been there so many times :(

but still hoping .....

for one day.....

to have it...

before i pass this world ;) he he


army3700 Mon Mar 3, 08 01:01 AM

i forgot to write you that i have the right anime for it ;) you have to see it i think you will like it allot and its : Yamato Nadeshiko Shichi Henge, and this is the information about it http://anidb.net/perl-bin/animedb.pl?show=anime&aid=4734

see ya


VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Mon Mar 3, 08 04:56 AM

I'll definatly look into that manga .

To go there but to never fit in must be frustraiting. Maybe you just haven't found the right person who lets you be who you are without worries. (I am talking about him or me? Hmm...) I hope the next time you go back you can join the beuty and be part of it.

Make a wish on a shooting star.
VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Mon Mar 3, 08 05:02 AM

Ooo! Wallflower sounds interesting. I like the sound of the girl (Forgotten her name but she sounds abit like me).

Make a wish on a shooting star.
army3700 Mon Mar 3, 08 09:25 PM

yeah as i hope for me to fit in the beauty world i want to see my friends there too ...

thanks and hope sooner that you can join to the beauty world so you can write how beauty it is :) ....


VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Tue Mar 4, 08 01:26 AM

Make a wish on a shooting star.
coolzaza (zaza) Mon Mar 3, 08 12:45 PM

wow so nice and i like it really a very good job

nothing in this world worth having comes easy
VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Mon Mar 3, 08 03:16 PM

Thank you.

Make a wish on a shooting star.
shezz_luvin_hoo (hyped-up) Sat Mar 8, 08 01:45 PM

You should seriousley consider publishing a book of poems or something, it is never too early, but can be too late.

Good job though hun

xxx


VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Mon Mar 10, 08 01:31 PM

Love the idea but i've got several reasons not to. 1. I don't have enough time. I am in education and my perants think education is very important (I partialy agree) 2. My perants don't see writing as an occupation. My dad backs me up but says education first and my Mum tells me to stop chasing stars (Not here exact words but it sounds nicer) 3. Half my poems get thrown away. One third of my poems are very personal, every poem i write is part of me and my life and some of them i feel are too much of a deepinsight of me. Like day break. I was into two minds of whether or not to put it on.

Make a wish on a shooting star.
shezz_luvin_hoo (hyped-up) Fri Mar 14, 08 02:48 PM

you should definately consider it though. i'm sure there are millions of people worldwide who could relate to some of them and would enjoy reading them (me for one). as soon as the summer hols are here, you should start writing, i will be. writing is and isn't an occupation. it can be a nice little earner when a book is published as it brings in money whenever someone buys it, but it can also earn you millions like harry potter has done for j k rowling. even if you only write when you have come home from a more reliable job, it could still work. i don't see why you should throw away any of your peoms. if you don't want to put them on BitComet, you can still keep them for yourself, hide them if you must, but don't throw anything away that is so personal. it could eventually destroy you inside. don't let you mam push you around. you're 16 for god's sake. keep writing, looking forward to the next.

talk soon babe

xxx


VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Sun Mar 16, 08 03:00 AM

I might try that but i don't know if my attention span will allow it (I get bored easily).

P.s. You don't know my mum she's scary.

Make a wish on a shooting star.
shezz_luvin_hoo (hyped-up) Thu Mar 20, 08 12:03 PM

ypu shouldn't be scared of your mam, it's not what she's for. take control of your life instead of being pushed around, make your own mistakes in order to shape you own personality and experiences. or are you willing to be one of the 40-something year olds who still live at home? still looking forward to the next babe

xxx


VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Thu Mar 20, 08 12:24 PM

1. I wouldn't be waiting for the next babe because i like guys thanks. 2. I plan to leave for Uni and never come back. I have to wait until i am 18 that's all. (That's funny it use to be i have to wait untill i am 16 and now when i have become 16 i am know waiting till i'm 18. I hope i am not forever waiting.) 3. You come over here and try to face my mum. I am scared to death of her. She has all the power in this family. I can't even look to my dad for help (He's tried several times to help but to no avail).

Make a wish on a shooting star.
shezz_luvin_hoo (hyped-up) Sun Mar 23, 08 11:49 AM

1. haha very funny

2. don't forever be waiting, it would be an incredibly boring life if you where.

3. give me some map directions + i'll be there in a few days (deadly serious).


VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Mon Mar 24, 08 03:10 AM

Why would you want to come over here? (I won't tell you but if you ask Shezzle, she might. I just don't want to be responsible for your death as well as mine.) I wouldn't want you to fight my mum. She's my own ghost, therefore i must face her (Though plan at the moment is to run away at the first chance i get). I just don't know what to do. Everytime i try to undermine her, for some freedom, her shes does something like banning the net and mum has never been good at comprimises.

Make a wish on a shooting star.
shezz_luvin_hoo (hyped-up) Mon Mar 24, 08 03:19 PM

i'd be responsible for my own death, and anyway you should hurry up and face her. the brave may not live very long, but the cautious don't live a life at all (where did i get that from???). you shouldn't need to find a compromise and stand your ground.

good luck

xxx


VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Tue Mar 25, 08 07:36 AM

That's like one of my phrases. It's better to die a lion rather than survive a mouse. Can't i runaway and get cavalry first. I don't want to have to face her alone. Like 30 seconds to mars's song attack (Runaway runaway and attack).

Make a wish on a shooting star.
shezz_luvin_hoo (hyped-up) Tue Mar 25, 08 03:04 PM

you don't have to face her alone. i'm here for you and i'd be there if i could. you should never run away from your problems, it only intensifies the ordeal. i'll help you through this as much as possible, but it's you that has to stand up to her (i sound like my brother) and get your own life. if she wraps you up in cotton wool then you'll never learn how to take care of yourself, tell her to allow you to put to use what you have learned in life so far so that you can become your own person and not your mum's mini. like i've said before, stand your ground, make your own mistakes in life, don't be forever waiting and keep writing.

My thoughts go to you

xxx


VioletShimmer (Wonderland) Wed Mar 26, 08 02:01 AM

I've been grounded now and all (Can you ground a 16 year old. Because they can lawfully live on their own). I spent too long at Shezzle's house. I was having soo much fun i nearly forgot to come back here (I did remember at around 6 o'clock though). See this is what happens when you undermine her. But still for once i felt like a real person my age rather than a couped bird. For once i was the one having fun not the one looking from the upstairs window at people half my age enjoying themselves on the park. But now i am grounded for the rest of the hols.

Make a wish on a shooting star.
shezz_luvin_hoo (hyped-up) Thu Mar 27, 08 09:25 AM